“HELP!!! Leave me!! Help, PLEASE!!!!”
“It’s a girl from your college”
“HEY!!! Hey YOU! LET HER GO YOU #%&$@#”
“Aunty, please check on her”
“I’ve lost my honor. Don’t want to lose more”
“He got there on time”
Hero. Messiah.
He was trembling.
7 months later
She saw him. Ignored.
He walked away. Smiling.
Phew! This was not easy. Lame amateurish effort. Couldn't come up with a title too. Oh well, Monkey is off my back now. Cheers.
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15 comments:
Hey I didn't quite understand ...
How many people are there? I like the way it is written but who is Aunty?
A girl, A guy and some bystanders.
Why did he walk away 'smiling'?
I'm thinking how does a guy feel when confronted by a girl who he once saved getting raped. I might feel relieved that she ignored him thus avoiding a probably awkward maybe embarrassing moment. And also the satisfaction that she is doing fine now. Maybe he understands why she 'had' to ignore him.
aunty??
She is one of the bystanders. The guy who saved her is requesting a women to speak to the girl and comfort her..
Sheesh, in order to fit in 55 words, I had to leave out so much. Now it's all so confusing! Even I am getting confused now! :P
I loved this! And even the not exactly clear what it meant added to it :)
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55 words ;)
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good story..
I am yet to come up with a "not so sad" one...
IHM - Thanks :)
Tara - 54 words to be precise! ;)
he he, if you get the monkey on your back, confuse everyone so much that they never put it on you again :) he he
But ya, this is difficult!
Rakesh - Hahaha I burst out laughing after reading your comment. Colleagues around me probably thought I'd lost it.
it was easy to understand this after reading comments :-)
Anyways not a bad attempt :-)
hmm.....this does bring back some memories.....probably a little bit embarassing for certain people :-)
And I'm wondering why you're calling it fiction???
:)
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